Ok, here is a 1st draft regeneration scene marking the debut of Matt Smith's Doctor:
Background:
The Doctor, Donna & Wilf are fleeing through the streets of London pursued by androids dressed as soldiers who are being used by the Master to stage a coup.
Wilf: I can’t go on Doctor. Leave me. Take Donna and go.
Donna: No way! We won’t leave you gramps.
The Doctor: You’ll just have to move faster old man!
Suddenly a car speeds up with men leaning out firing shots.
The Doctor: RUN!
They run down a side street and through some alleyways, emerging eventually onto Old Compton St in the heart of Soho.
Donna: Whew, looks like we’ve shaken them off. You okay gramps?
Wilf: No. I’m cream crackered and me leg’s gone numb.
The Doctor: Exercise is good for the old. If you don’t lose it you use it… or maybe the other way round.
Two black-clad women approach in skimpy skirts:
1st Woman: *to Doctor* Ere, you looking for company ducky?
Donna: I hardly think he’d be interested in you. Daft tart!
2nd Woman: Ere, who are you callin’ daft? Ugly cow.
1st woman: *To Wilf* Hows about we give you a good time *winks*
Wilf licks his lips, however the Doctor pushes him along.
The Doctor: Come team! We’ve no time to dally with street women. Onward!
They rush round a corner and into a bar.
The Doctor: Lets get some drinks and mingle with the customers. They won’t think to look for us in a bar.
Ordering the drinks, Donna notices that the people in the bar are all men.
Donna: Doctor, I think this is a gay bar.
Doctor: So what, lets mingle.
The Doctor grabs an attractive young man and they start to kiss. However as they do so, the man pulls out a knife. He stabs the Doctor in the stomach then pushes through the customers and leaves. As he does so, he phones the Master on his mobile.
Man: Target located and eliminated .
Donna & Wilf help the injured Doctor out of the bar and into a corridor, next to the toilets.
Several men are engaging in sexual activity near the door.
Donna: Ere, go and do that somewhere else. There’s an injured man here and I don’t want to have to gawp at your whatsanamy business at this crucial moment. Oh no, its starting!
The Doctor collapses and regenerates into the 11th Doctor played by Matt Smith.
Donna: Doctor, Doctor….. Are you ok? Love the new floppy hair.
One of the men in the corridor: Vast improvement, I must say.
The Doctor: Where… where am I?
Donna: In a bar surrounded by horny men who seem to fancy your new body.
The Doctor: I must be in heaven………
……………….. THE END
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THAT's it?
THAT is what you want to see on television?
THAT is what you think OTHER people want to see on television?
THAT is a worthy departure for David Tennant and a reasonable introduction for Matt Smith?
THAT is the most detailed description you can come up with?
THAT is the best characterization you are capable of?
One thing is for sure.
THAT is not worth the wait.
I think that this is an interesting and original scenario for the regeneration.
Tell me Sparacus
WHY is the Doctor rendered a cameo in his own death scene?
WHY doesn't he get any last words?
WHY does a knife to the stomach kill the Doctor?
WHY does the Doctor decide to randomly kiss a strange man, something he has never done before? Focussing on hormones in the middle of a crisis is something the Doctor has always despised, hence his catchphrase "Stop it, Jack".
Why does the Master's assassin randomly happen to be in the gay bar the Doctor randomly happens to visit and the Doctor randomly happens to kiss?
Why doesn't he make sure the Doctor's dead?
Why doesn't he kill anyone else?
Why doesn't anyone try to help the Doctor? You have all the gay men mindless screw each other while a man lies dying. Are you wanting the media to portray homosexuals as knife-wielding sociopaths? Cause you portray them as violent, sadistic, untrustworthy bullies who don't even react to a man changing his appearance.
Why is Wilf using Cockney rhyming slang?
Why is the Doctor so rude to an 80 year old man?
Why is the Master using androids dressed as soldiers? Why not just androids? Where do the androids go to? They just vanish.
Who are the drive-by shooters, or are you trying to negatively stereotype youths as well as gays and prostitutes?
Why don't the prostitutes try to help an old man who is clearly unwell?
Why don't they notice the android soldiers cutting up the town?
Why didn't you have your preferred first words for the 11th Doctor, and I quote, "She said like yeah and I said like yeah. Yay! I'm young again?"
Why is the Doctor more interested in being seduced by all the men who callously watched him suffer and die in agony without so much as lifting a finger?
Why didn't you describe the regeneration like you SAID you would?
The Doctor is not a cameo. I don't see why you think this. And knife wounds to not always cause immediate death. The Doctor kisses the man because he wanted to blend into the crowd and because the 10th Doctor is spontaneous. He is not rude to Wilf, he just needs to hurry him along.
The androids are dressed as soldiers because the Master has secretly taken over the army ready to launch his coup. The assassin followed them into the bar. Moreover it is not my intention to portray gay people negatively, they were having fun and did not realise that the Doctor had been stabbed. The guys in the corridor did not notice the actual regeneration.
The Doctor is not a cameo. I don't see why you think this.He's not the centre of the action, he doesn't get much dialogue, he does nothing heroic and doesn't even resolve the plot. He doesn't get a farewell to his companion, or even defeat the passer-by who murdered him. His defining characteristic is to be stupid and die.
And knife wounds to not always cause immediate death.Exactly. Why should they kill a Time Lord who can purge his body of toxins and radiation? He has two hearts for crying out loud. A knife wound is less likely to trigger regeneration than a peanut allergy.
The Doctor kisses the man because he wanted to blend into the crowd and because the 10th Doctor is spontaneous.Except... he isn't. Look at any episode and he is incredibly reserved when it comes to sexuality. Look at the Doctor's Daughter, or The Shakespeare Code, or The Idiot's Lantern. There's a time and a place and that is NOT when you're on the run being hunted by assassins.
He is not rude to Wilf, he just needs to hurry him along.You don't think yelling at an 80 year old man for being slow is rude? Why didn't the Doctor just pick him up and carry him?
The androids are dressed as soldiers because the Master has secretly taken over the army ready to launch his coup.
Pathetic! Soldiers on the street would raise as much panic and confusion as androids would. Why does the Master need to launch a coup anyway? He doesn't care about Earth.
The assassin followed them into the bar.And niether the Doctor or Donna noticed. Despite this mean the Doctor goes to snog the first person AFTER them into the bar without asking them anything. Or even checking that they're assassins.
Moreover it is not my intention to portray gay people negatively, they were having fun and did not realise that the Doctor had been stabbed.
So you portray them as selfish and stupid.
The guys in the corridor did not notice the actual regeneration.
What? They didn't notice all the explosive energy? But they DID notice the Doctor's new face despite Wilf and Donna being in the way? Despite being in a narrow corridor, the ENTIRE clintelle decided to leer at the new Doctor and then compare his face with the last one?
You depict them as selfish, callous, rude, hedonistic and superficial. You depict women as stupid whores, older people as randy cripples, youths as gun-totting psychopaths, and the armed forces as robotic killers.
What's the moral about how the Tenth Doctor died? How do you think people are going to react to see a children's TV hero stabbed to death in a gay bar?
They're going to think gay bars are the sort of placed you get stabbed, that's what. And if you are stabbed by some guy you kiss, none of the other men in the bar are going to do a damn thing to help you. Indeed, if you collapse, bleeding outside the toilets, they'll all be too busy having sex to help you. If you can't regenerate, you'll die.
The fact the assassin was an attractive young man who allowed himself to be kissed before stabbing the Doctor would make the audience automatically distrust anyone so secure in their sexuality.
Besides which, on past form the Doctor's new persona is informed by the circumstances of his demise. It is, therefore, highly likely if you killed off the Tenth Doctor in this manner, the Eleventh Doctor would be a furious homophobe determined to get revenge for his past self's poor treatment.
No doubt his final line is not "I must be in heaven... cause you're all DEAD!!" before he goes on a killing spree on the stupid apes who let him die.
This scene of yours is the most intolerant, bigoted material imaginable. It not only pisses on Doctor Who, but slanders gay and straight, man and woman, young and old. No one comes out of it in a positive light.
And worst of all, you're not even going to redraft it, are you?
"This scene of yours is the most intolerant, bigoted material imaginable. It not only pisses on Doctor Who, but slanders gay and straight, man and woman, young and old. No one comes out of it in a positive light."
What about its negative aspects?
The spelling's atrocious. Don't you understand how to use Microsoft Word?
Well? Come on, Spara. Why so shy? Couldn't you think of anything to say? You're normally so prompt, especially to your only remaining blog follower.
Blood hell! You're not replying at all now! What sort of comment moderation is this - are you actually paying attention, or are you too busy waffling on about Marco Polo the psycho chef being a better Master than John Simm, mmm?
Oh yeah. I'm on the pulse.
"Well? Come on, Spara. Why so shy? Couldn't you think of anything to say? You're normally so prompt, especially to your only remaining blog follower"
I'm sure that there are many people who read this blog.
"Blood hell! You're not replying at all now! What sort of comment moderation is this - are you actually paying attention, or are you too busy waffling on about Marco Polo the psycho chef being a better Master than John Simm, mmm?"
I was busy on the DWF.
The spelling's atrocious. Don't you understand how to use Microsoft Word?
A few spelling errors do not invalidate the quality of my scene.
A few spelling errors do not invalidate the quality of my scene.More evasion. Do you use Microsoft Word or not? It's not exactly a complicated question, nor is the program hard to find or difficult to use. If you don't it just goes to reaffirm how you refuse to take any steps to improve your writing.
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